Some people think that it is important to use leisure time for activities that improve our mind health, such as reading and doing word puzzles. Other people feel that it is important to rest our mind during leisure time. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Some men and women believe that doing
activities
which are useful for mental health like reading or playing word puzzles during
rest
time
is necessary, whereas
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others believe that it is better to take a
rest
. I think that having our
brain
to
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take a break is significant.
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essay will discuss both views and my opinion. On the one hand, as people who are mature enough to understand that
brain
must exercise to keep in shape are
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adult
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or older, they are already busy enough so they can only practice their
brain
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the
rest
time
between their
activities
, while they know that they must block a few minutes until an hour to do that. Gaining new knowledge from books or
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problem solving
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from word puzzles can be
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alternatives for anyone to ensure that his mind keeps healthy.
Furthermore
, doing those
activities
is better compared to scrolling through social media to waste his
time
.
On the other hand
, resting our mind after doing
activities
like working or studying
that is
already draining our
brain
is important.
Furthermore
, several
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find that taking a break between working could make people become more productive at the end of the day.
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, in a productive method like Podomoro which
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people
to
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take a small break like 5 minutes after 20 minutes
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and a big break after several times doing that, Podomoro
also
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everyone
to
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do entertaining
activities
to make sure everyone's
brain
has enough
rest
to refresh before working again. To conclude, while some part of
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society
say
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the need to exercise their
brain
by reading or playing word
puzzle
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in their recreation
time
,
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others think having a break is
also
needed. In my opinion, when it is
rest
time
, it is better to take a
rest
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • leisure time
  • mentally stimulating activities
  • cognitive skills
  • concentration
  • boost memory
  • sense of accomplishment
  • reduce stress
  • mental relaxation
  • mental fatigue recovery
  • comprehensive mental health benefits
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