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Some people think that it is important to use leisure time for activities that improve our mind health, such as reading and doing word puzzles. Other people feel that it is important to rest our mind during leisure time. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Some men and women believe that doing
activities
 which are useful for mental health like reading or playing word puzzles during
rest
time
 is necessary, whereas
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others believe that it is better to take a
rest
. I think that having our
brain
to
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take a break is significant.
This
 essay will discuss both views and my opinion. On the one hand, as people who are mature enough to understand that
brain
 must exercise to keep in shape are
young
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adult
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adults
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 or older, they are already busy enough so they can only practice their
brain
in
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 the
rest
time
 between their
activities
, while they know that they must block a few minutes until an hour to do that. Gaining new knowledge from books or
practicing
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problem solving
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skill
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 from word puzzles can be
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alternatives for anyone to ensure that his mind keeps healthy.
Furthermore
, doing those
activities
 is better compared to scrolling through social media to waste his
time
.
On the other hand
, resting our mind after doing
activities
 like working or studying
that is
 already draining our
brain
 is important.
Furthermore
, several
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 find that taking a break between working could make people become more productive at the end of the day.
For example
, in a productive method like Podomoro which
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 people
to
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take a small break like 5 minutes after 20 minutes
activities
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 and a big break after several times doing that, Podomoro
also
suggest
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 everyone
to
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do entertaining
activities
 to make sure everyone's
brain
 has enough
rest
 to refresh before working again. To conclude, while some part of
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society
say
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 the need to exercise their
brain
 by reading or playing word
puzzle
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puzzles
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 in their recreation
time
,
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others think having a break is
also
 needed. In my opinion, when it is
rest
time
, it is better to take a
rest
.
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