Human activity has negatively affected the natural environment around the world. Some people believe that governments should immeditely take actions to reverse these effects while others think there are more urgent problems to be tackled.

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There are several human activities that have impacted the natural environment around the globe. There are a group of people who believe that governments should take
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instantly to revere these effects.
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, there are others who think there are more urgent problems to be solved. I personally feel that governments should immediately take action to save the world.
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, There is a number of people who use their own mode of transport to commute to work, which in turn results in a lot of traffic and
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contributes to a high level of pollution. Due to
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, many of them become prone to lung diseases
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asthma and many more. one possible solution is
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government can encourage individuals to use public transportation.
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, people should be more responsible and stop throwing garbage near the water bodies.
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affects the neighbourhood with a damp smell and
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pollutes the water bodies making
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of fishes difficult and disturbing the ecosystem. The role of the government should be to impose
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and high
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of fines.
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, they should install CCTV cameras to watch all.
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, factories
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contribute to air pollution and waste management. The air from chimneys is polluted and mixed into
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. For
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, Government should educate individuals through mass media and impose factory threshold limit. To sum up, I think governments should be more strict with
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laws in order to create a peaceful environment and world for all of us to live by. so, individuals must
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be responsible and abide by them for our better future.
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