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The charts below show temperature and rainfall in Equatorial climate and Mediterranean climate. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant

The charts below show temperature and rainfall in Equatorial climate and Mediterranean climate. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant
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The chart provides information about the climatic conditions in
Equatorial
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the Equatorial
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 and Mediterranean regions. It illustrates
about
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apply
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the
temperature
 and
also
about
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the amount of
rainfall
 in those regions.
Overall
, the
rainfall
 and the
temperature
 in the respective regions were represented in cu mm and degree
celcius
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celsius
 for a period of one
year
.
Firstly
, on one
hand
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 the
rainfall
 in the Equatorial
climate
 had a rise in the
intial
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initial
 month of the
year
 later in the
mid
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mid-months
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months
 it fluctuated between 150-200 cu mm.
At the end
 of the
year
 in the
months
 of November and
December
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,December
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rainfall
 had
it’s
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its
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 peak.
On the other hand
 in the Mediterranean
climate
 the
rainfall
 had
it’s
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its
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 peak in the
intial
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initial
months
 and
at the end
 of the
year
,
however
 in the mid
months
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,months
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 there was a drastic decrease in the
rainfall
.
Secondly
, the
temperature
 in the Equatorial
climate
 remained steady throughout the
year
 which was about
25 degree
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25-degree
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celcius
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celsius
,
however
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,however
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 the
temperature
 in the Mediterranean
climate
 increased drastically in the
intial
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initial
months
 and had
it’s
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its
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peak
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a peak
the peak
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 in the month of August lather there was a rapid fall in the
temperature
 which
equaled
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equalled
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 to the
intial
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initial
months
.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "at the end, however".
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Contractions: Don't use contractions.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words temperature, rainfall, year, climate, months with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 4 times.
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