The charts below show temperature and rainfall in Equatorial climate and Mediterranean climate. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant

The charts below show temperature and rainfall in Equatorial climate and Mediterranean

climate. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make

comparisons where relevant
The chart provides information about the climatic conditions in
Equatorial
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the Equatorial
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and Mediterranean regions. It illustrates
about
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the
temperature
and
also
about
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the amount of
rainfall
in those regions.
Overall
, the
rainfall
and the
temperature
in the respective regions were represented in cu mm and degree
celcius
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celsius
for a period of one
year
.
Firstly
, on one
hand
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the
rainfall
in the Equatorial
climate
had a rise in the
intial
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initial
month of the
year
later in the
mid
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mid-months
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months
it fluctuated between 150-200 cu mm.
At the end
of the
year
in the
months
of November and
December
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,December
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rainfall
had
it’s
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its
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peak.
On the other hand
in the Mediterranean
climate
the
rainfall
had
it’s
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its
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peak in the
intial
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initial
months
and
at the end
of the
year
,
however
in the mid
months
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,months
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there was a drastic decrease in the
rainfall
.
Secondly
, the
temperature
in the Equatorial
climate
remained steady throughout the
year
which was about
25 degree
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25-degree
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celcius
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celsius
,
however
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,however
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the
temperature
in the Mediterranean
climate
increased drastically in the
intial
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initial
months
and had
it’s
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its
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peak
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a peak
the peak
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in the month of August lather there was a rapid fall in the
temperature
which
equaled
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equalled
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to the
intial
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initial
months
.
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Contractions: Don't use contractions.
Vocabulary: Replace the words temperature, rainfall, year, climate, months with synonyms.
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