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Many governments invest a great deal of money in space research. What are the advantages and potential disadvantages of spending money on space exploration?

#governments #money #space #research #exploration
There is no iota of doubt
earth
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 atmosphere is good as it used to be, cause of
research
 and globalization human beings are destroying the
earth
 very badly. The majority of governments around the world are spending a huge amount of funds to explore space . There are considerable merits and demerits to
this
 phenomenon,
However
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 we are going to discuss both. When we understand in-depth primary there are two important benefits I can think about. the main one is when govt do
research
 they need
lot
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 of employees,
therefore
, it helps to reduce the unemployment rate.
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, in India recently government hire 70000 people for a
research
 team. Another benefit is the possibility of living on another planet makes us hope that in future if
earth
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 does not continue well for living beings
then
 we can shift to another planet;
for instance
, when the covid hit everyone wanted to leave the
earth
 and move to the mars.
On the other hand
, Spending
money
 on analysis in other places is wasting taxpayer
money
 which is earned by hard work.
instead
 of the community should spend that
money
 to improve the health of
earth
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, it will be more beneficial rather
then
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 spending capital on
research
.
For example
, due to a covid
lot
 of countries were locked down and people were working from home.
As a result
lot
 of that
earth
 was healing very rapidly. In India, government spend
lot
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 of
money
 on cleaning of holy river Ganga but the Ganga was automatically cleaned in lockdown. In conclusion, While a large number of countries are allocating budgets to explore outer space , there are several benefits and drawbacks to
this
 to discuss. I personally feel like the advantages like creating opportunities as an industry for many young scientists,and a vision to search for a redundant planet for living outweigh the disadvantages
such
 as
money
 wastage and not focusing on the other essential services.
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