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2. It has been claimed that workers over 50 are not responsive to rapidly changing ideas in the modern workplace and that for this reason younger workers are to be preferred. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Some people believe that due to the rapid changes occurring in modern workplaces, it is better to employ younger than older folk. I do not believe that
this
 is the case. One argument in support of younger employees is that older employees could be more set in their ways and potentially against any change. To an extent,
this
 may be true, but there are many flexible and intelligent workers over 50, while there are inflexible and narrow-minded younger ones. Attitude towards change is not a result of age but of personality type. That said, physical changes occurring with age could mean certain jobs are more suited to a younger person.
For instance
, psychologists seem to be in agreement that memory declines with age for people not remaining mentally active. In high-tech industries
such
 as computer programming, where it is so important to be able to work with so much information, numbers and calculations, being younger may be an advantage.
However
, older workers have a wide range of other positive attributes that they can bring to their working environment. Generally, they have more work experience than those who are younger.
In addition
, as can be seen with the trend of many department stores in the UK to take on older staff, they are seen to be more reliable and respectful. These are important in any kind of working environment. In conclusion,
therefore
, there is no evidence to support employing young employees as opposed to those over 50. It would seem that a mix of the best qualities of old and young is preferential in order to ensure the most productive environment evolves.
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