Nowadays eating habits of people around the world are changing causing them many health problems including obesity. Why do people tend to eat so badly? What can be done to improve their eating habits?

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Globally, the way individuals commune has taken a different dimension leading to a lot of health issues

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busy life activities and the most viable solution is to make

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and prepare healthy

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one of the enormous cause

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are not presently communing well.

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attention has been shifted to what will put monies into their pockets neglecting their health.

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, they tend to consume anything they lay their hands on.

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of junk

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to eat poorly.

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and chips are easily on the street and so

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and resources to cook, individuals prefer to just walk in and satisfy their hunger without considering the nutritional content.

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, in a recent survey conducted, it was recorded that about 70% of

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cuisine for themselves. A key factor to

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contain the nutrients needed for growth in their right proportions and not bicarbonate soda that

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predominant in these junk

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been altered because of our

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life as well as

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Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

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Lexical resource: 4.0

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Grammatical Range: 4.0

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Topic Vocabulary:

processed food
fast food
nutritional education
calorie-dense
nutrient-poor
convenience
busy lifestyles
food deserts
marketing and advertising
food choices
cultural norms
food preparation
obesity
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Nowadays eating habits of people around the world are changing causing them many health problems including obesity. Why do people tend to eat so badly? What can be done to improve their eating habits?

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Since most information about culture and history can be found online, museums and art galleries are no longer needed. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Keywords: online information; museum Type: Agree & Disagree

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The plans below show a student accommodation buildings 2010 and now. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant You should write at least 150 words.

Should wealthy people be obliged to share their financial success with poor people by supporting health services and education, or is this the responsibility of the poor to improve their own standard of living? Give your opinion.

Successful people try new things and take risks rather than only doing what they know how to do well.. Do you agree or disagree with the following statement.