Nowadays, a growing number of people with health problems are trying alternative medicines and treatments instead of visiting their usual doctor. Do you think this is a positive or a negative development?

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Since ancient times public tried to treat themselves with herbals and other natural products.
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alternative medicine. Nowadays, more and more a society with some diseases decides to use different medicines
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I will try to discuss the pros and cons. In my opinion, the disadvantages outweigh the advantages of using traditional medicine. The first reason is that nobody knows how
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allergic reactions and some
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who do not have any medical education try different medicines. They do not know what the result will be and hope that it will be positive but not always is like that.
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there are a lot of disadvantages,
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might make people not go to their usual doctor. The first and the main pro is that using herbals does not cause environmental problems
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as air pollution or gas waste. Many pharmaceutical plants use chemicals which have a harmful effect on the environment. The other reason is that alternative medicines are usually much cheaper than usual
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as you do not have to go to a pharmacy and buy expensive drugs. To sum it up, the alternative medication will be forever because it has some advantages that many population think that
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can outweigh the disadvantages but I do not think so. The conventional drug which develops rocketry will drive out other types of medication in the future.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • alternative medicines
  • treatments
  • positive development
  • negative development
  • health problems
  • usual doctor
  • access
  • personalized approach
  • holistic well-being
  • lack of regulation
  • evidence-based research
  • proper medical treatment
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