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Money- discussion..in some countries a few people earn extremely high salaries . Some people think that this is good for county ,while others believers that government should control salary in limited amount people can earn .. discuss both views and give an opinion.

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It is debate on government should give extreme vegan or not.
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, I agree with
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 view. Government should provide salaries to all
people
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 according to their jobs.
This
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 essay intends to discuss both views and give an opinion. The
first
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 and foremost reason for providing a huge amount of salary is to
increase
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 the job opportunities.
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,
people
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 can more invest in international and national companies if they have money.
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, there will
increase
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 the job for manual workers and educated
people
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. Another concrete reason is, It helps to develop the country. Rich
people
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 have to pay more tax.
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, tax can use increasing
facilities
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such
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 as health care
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, educational
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, transportation
facilities
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, and so on.
On the other hand
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, there are chances to
increase
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 the space between rich and poor
people
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.
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, Many tourists prefer a high range of accommodation and transportation due to comfort especially.
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 rich
people
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 can enhance their business by a profitable margin.
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, rural
people
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 are still suffering from unemployment and poverty.
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 to that, crimes and violence will
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 in the future due to high salaries. Many counties have High crimes rate due to numerous properties and money. To conclude, I reiterate my opinion that there are countless pros and cons of making high salaries. But the government should give money limitless. It helps to develop the county in many ways. Apart from that, crime issues can mitigate by introducing strict legislation.
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