the two maps below show road access to a city hospital in 2007 and 2010.
The data on
road
access to a city
hospital in 2007 and 2010 are illustrated in two
maps. The first map is for 2007 and the second
one is newer.
The biggest change enforced on a car
park
. The car
park
expanded and encompassed some adjacent lands. Car
Correct article usage
The car
park
used
Add a missing verb
was used
to
both public and Change preposition
by
staffs
in 2007, in comparison with 2010 Fix the agreement mistake
staff
that
the Correct word choice
when
car
park
turned
Add a missing verb
was turned
to
the Change preposition
into
staffs'
Change noun form
staffs
car
park
and the new car
park
built to the east of city
hospital Correct article usage
the city
allocated
for Add a missing verb
was allocated
public
Correct article usage
the public
witch
has one entrance to Correct your spelling
which
ring
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the ring
road
.
Furthermore
, the bus
station was built to the west of the hospital road
. and all the bus
stopes
were ruined.
Correct your spelling
stops
Two
roundabouts substituted
for the intersection of Add a missing verb
were substituted
city
road
and hospital road
and the junction of hospital road
and city
hospital. Two
little roads lead from the bus
station to these roundabouts.
Overall
, in 2010 they expand the car
park
and divided it into two
sections, public, and staff. Besides
, they transformed the bus
stops into the bus
station. Also
, they replaced the junctions with roundabouts.Submitted by chizarisara on
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