the two maps below show road access to a city hospital in 2007 and 2010.

the two maps below show road access to a city hospital in 2007 and 2010.
The data on
road
access to a
city
hospital in 2007 and 2010 are illustrated in
two
maps. The first map is for 2007 and the
second
one is newer. The biggest change enforced on a
car
park
. The
car
park
expanded and encompassed some adjacent lands.
Car
Correct article usage
The car
show examples
park
used
Add a missing verb
was used
show examples
to
Change preposition
by
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both public and
staffs
Fix the agreement mistake
staff
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in 2007, in comparison with 2010
that
Correct word choice
when
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the
car
park
turned
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was turned
show examples
to
Change preposition
into
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the
staffs'
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staffs
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car
park
and the new
car
park
built to the east of
city
Correct article usage
the city
show examples
hospital
allocated
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was allocated
show examples
for
public
Correct article usage
the public
show examples
witch
Correct your spelling
which
show examples
has one entrance to
ring
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the ring
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road
.
Furthermore
, the
bus
station was built to the west of the hospital
road
. and all the
bus
stopes
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stops
show examples
were ruined.
Two
roundabouts
substituted
Add a missing verb
were substituted
show examples
for the intersection of
city
road
and hospital
road
and the junction of hospital
road
and
city
hospital.
Two
little roads lead from the
bus
station to these roundabouts.
Overall
, in 2010 they expand the
car
park
and divided it into
two
sections, public, and staff.
Besides
, they transformed the
bus
stops into the
bus
station.
Also
, they replaced the junctions with roundabouts.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 71%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words road, city, two, car, park, bus with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • accessibility
  • dual carriageway
  • roundabout
  • traffic flow
  • multi-story car park
  • green spaces
  • pedestrian provisions
  • footpaths
  • traffic signals
  • construction phase
  • ambulances
  • carriageway expansion
  • traffic congestion
  • pedestrian crossings
  • urban planning
  • infrastructure development
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