What are the possible advantages and drawbacks of being a professional athlete?

sport is one of the most important
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society nowadays. it is cause
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famous and rich. a professional
athlete
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for people who try hard at sport.
however
, it has some trouble too. in
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write about professional
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Sport promotes mental and physical health. Everybody needs to exercise for keeping healthy.
However
, being a professional
athlete
is so hard and needs
lots
of
exercise
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.is
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essay I write about the benefits and drawbacks of
a professional
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professional athletes
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athletes
. There are
lots
of advantages of exercising professional. The
first
advantage is being famous. When an
athlete
plays professionally and becomes a professional
athlete
, he or she will start to play in national champions. She or he will start to play in national champions.
thus
, she will be shown on tv.
As a result
, he or she was seen by people and everybody will know him. The
second
advantage is earning more money. as we know, when someone is famous, the country press will invite him or her for their advertising. So, he or she can earn money in different ways.
Although
being a professional
athlete
has
lots
of benefits, it has some disadvantages too. The
first
one is that
athletes
have to hard practice every day for many years.
For example
, professional football players have to spend 5 hours a day running and 2 hours on bodybuilding and they have to play football when they are 16 years old. The
second
disadvantages are hard to diet. Professional
athletes
have to eat special food because hard practices need food with
lots
of calories and protein.
For example
, professional football players have to eat 2 potatoes with 5 eggs every day. So, they cannot eat every food. In summary, being famous and earning more money are two benefits of
a professional
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professional athletes
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athletes
However
, it has some disadvantages too. The
first
is that
athlete
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needs to hard practice for many years and the
second
is that he or she has to get a hard diet.
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