some people believe that carrying cash should not be necessary and all payments ought to be digital. Others argue that having paper money still has benefits. What do you believe and why? Give reason for your answer, and include relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

While some
people
believe that carrying money is much more
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benefit able
and suitable. Another community prefer to bank transactions
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online or in digitalized manner.
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On the other hand
, we all do know that not every region in the world has a network connection to carry out online transactions. Because of
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network,
people
believe that the
use
of cash still
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some advantages. As an example, according to
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daily magazines nowadays, writers have mentioned that only half of the population
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to access
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world. Due to
this
fact,
people
tend to choose to carry cash rather than trying to find other ways
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.
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, others would argue about
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halfway through as it is very convenient. It’s a kind of wasting your time, life and sweat by staying for so long in long queues. It’s so horrible and makes us more tired of living. Bills can be made within a
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mobile devices. Results and payments will show right at your fingertips. As an example,
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of online banking
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significant capital because of its convenience to the customers. Without
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,
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mood we can simply follow
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transaction
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. In conclusion,
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the fact that
people
like to
use
physical cash payments, I strongly believe that
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of online transaction platforms
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much
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better.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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