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some people think that is better to educate boys and girls in separate school. other, however , belive that they should be taught in mixed schools. Discuss both views and give your own opinion

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Education plays a vital role in everybody's life. In recent years, there has been an argument among people that
children
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 of both genders should be taught in separate
schools
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instead
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 of
co-education
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. In
this
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 essay, I shall discuss both perspectives and provide my opinion. On one side, Some people think that it is better to educate
children
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 in
co-education
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.
Co-education
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 engenders good communication and there will be no gender difference.
Children
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 after their graduation will mingle with their colleagues properly.
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, a girl after her graduation will work in an office without gender differences.
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 it will be easy for
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 girl to communicate with her colleagues. On the other side, Some people feel that it is better to educate their
children
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 in separate
schools
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 based on gender differences. Providing education separately will reduce teenage-issues life love affairs. In
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 way, students can concentrate only on their studies. To conclude, In my opinion, it is better to provide education in
co-education
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schools
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 rather than in separate
schools
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 because there are more benefits in
co-education
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 rather than in separate
schools
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.
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    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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