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Some people believe that university should offer places for people with high marks, Others says that universities accept all age of people even if they do not well at schools. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion

#people #university #offer #places #marks #universities #age #schools
Admission
in
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 good Universities is very relevant for the
further
 growth of
students
 in their careers. Because
,
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 getting a good job is need of
hour
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now a days
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 and that depends on
quality
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the quality
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 of University in which student is studying or will
passout
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pass out
 in future. Big MNCs and IT companies
also
 prefer renowned universities for placements I believe high
marks
 should not be given
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priority
while
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 accepting
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students
.
Talent
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 of
students
do
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 not depend on
marks
 alone, some are good in sports, practical experiments,arts etc on the other side some are good in academics and score reasonably good
marks
.
In addition
 to
this
 we have
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a lot
alot
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a lot
 of
real life
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he
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 was never good in studies but achieved one
the
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 most prestigious and honoured
rank
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 in
country
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the country
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. In conclusion to
this
, I must say that only high
schools
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marks
 should not be the
creteria
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criteria
 for selecting the
students
 , though Universities can give preference for high scores which includes
scholarship
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a scholarship
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 to some extent etc and must not close doors for the other
students
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • meritocracy
  • academic excellence
  • rigors of university education
  • inclusive
  • lifelong learning
  • diversity
  • workforce skills
  • practical experience
  • enrich
  • holistic admissions approach
  • extracurricular activities
  • personal statements
  • well-rounded student selection
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