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With advances in technological communication, more and more people are able to work from home. This increase of homeworking had been of real benefit to workers. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion.

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With the improvements
of
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 online communication platforms, more and more people can make a choice to
work
 from
home
. While
,
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 I agree that working from
home
 can provide many advantages to workers. But, there are a lot of weaknesses
by
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 working from
home
 In my opinion, many people do achieve
work
 tests without attending their office through technological communications. They may have flexibility between personal
life
 and professional
life
 because they have not been restricted by their working hours and they have no longer prepared time to go
work
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. If a person enjoys learning new skills, he or she can learn new things
instead
 of spending time going back and forth to the office.
As a result
, he or she can improve
self satisfaction
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 due to the personal development which can support his or her professional career as well as
they
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can study continuously without missing
work
.
On the other hand
, they can not get enough of a social workplace in their
home
 rather than office
life
. They are able to
work
 alone without co-workers.
For instance
, they can do ideas sharing and make conversation during break time as a way to relax in the workplace. The workplace atmosphere and relationship are immensely important to improve
work
 efficiency and efficientiveness in an organisation. When they
work
 alone, they will not be able to have discussions with colleagues.
Consequently
, they become depressed and experience an increasing sense of isolation. In conclusion, while online communication impacts on
flexibility
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 of private
life
 and professions, I
also
 agree that
work
 isolation will be
some
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threats
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for
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 people.
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