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The pie charts below shoe the average household expenditures in Japan and Malaysia in the year 2010. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisions where relevant.

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The pie charts compare the average household spending in
Japan
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 and
Malaysia
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 in terms of five important categories in 2010. Overall, it is clear that Japanese and Malaysian people spent the largest proportion of their budget on just three categories, namely housing, food, and other goods and services.
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, the expenditures on healthcare and transport in
Japan
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doubled the figures for
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. In
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Malaysian
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 households, the greatest proportion of spending was on housing, which represented 34% of the total expenditure. while in
Japan
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, the figures for
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 category
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 just 21%. Japanese householders spent
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 large amount of their income on other goods and services, at 29%. Meanwhile, the rate of spending
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 category in
Malaysia
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 was slightly slower at 26%. In terms of food, the percentages
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 expenses for both nations were relatively similar, at 27% for
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 and 24% for
Japan
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. In both countries, the smallest proportion of spending was on healthcare. In
Malaysia
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 accounted for 3% of the total household expenses, while the figure for transport represented 10%. These
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figures
 were exactly doubled in
Japan
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 which were 6% and 20% respectively.
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