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What are the advantages and disadvantages of a cashless society

#cashless #society
Nowadays,
bank issued
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bank-issued
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cards
such
 as debit
cards
 and
credit
cards
plays
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 a crucial role in our society and in our economy by enabling
cashless
 payments as they eliminate the need to carry
cash
 in the wallet. They
also
 protect the users from being robbed.
However
, a
cashless
 society is not ideal. It
also
 has its own defects because no amount of
cashless
payment
 can totally replace
the
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cash
 as some currency will always be in circulation at all times. In
this
 essay, both merits and demerits are discussed. For the advantages, they can increase the overall purchases of the people.
Credit
cards
 provide a specific sum of
loan
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loans
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 to the individual from the bank.
Therefore
, if you do not have3
cash
 in your wallet you can purchase anything.
Cashless
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method
 increases the purchasing power of the
person
.
However
, it is a double-edged sword. It can be bad or good depending upon the habit of a
person
.
Credit
cards
 are
also
 helpful in emergency situations
such
 as medical bills, pharmacy bills etc. For eg. in a medical emergency like an accident if a
person
 does not have
large
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 sum of money in the wallet
then
 he/she can use
the
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credit
 card for
payment
. Since all the transactions are recorded, it allows people to track their
expenditure
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expenditures
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.
Although
,
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online
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the online
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payment
method
 has numerous pros, it
also
 has
few
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a few
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 cons as well. Excess expenditure is one of the main
demerit
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demerits
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 of online
payment
method
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methods
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. As we all know, humans have a habit of spending
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a lot
alot
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a lot
 of money than they can earn because they have
lot
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 of money
in
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on
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 their
cards
. For eg., in a recent report, scientists
has
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 concluded that people spend more via
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bank-issued
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bank issued
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bank-issued
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cards
 as compared to
the
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cash
.
Credit
catrds
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cards
also
 have
high interest
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 rates.
Also
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credit
cards
comes
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 with
monthly
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 bill, if a
person
 does not pay the bill on time, they must pay penalty.
Furthermore
,
cards
 can be misused by anyone if they are lost.
The online
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 payments
comes
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 with their own benefits and drawbacks. It is not exactly a realistic idea because of their technical glitches.
However
, we can reduce the amount of
cash
 in circulation by promoting the
cashless
 process.
It's
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 all
depend
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depends
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 on how we use the
method
.
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