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Some high school required all student to wear school uniform other higher school permit student to decide what to wear to school. Which of these two school policies you think is better?

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There are two beliefs regarding the topic of what to wear in high
school
. some schools give permission to the students to choose what to wear and some institutes have specific
regulation
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 and ask the students to have
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a uniform
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uniform
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uniforms
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. from my point of view,
benefits
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the benefits
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 of wearing
uniform
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a uniform
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are
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outweigh
outweighed
outweight
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outweigh
 its drawback.
first
 of all, in any educational complex
that
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 each
members
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has
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specific
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 outfit, distinguishing the
straingers
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strangers
 will be easy and if a person comes to
school
 for any reason, the guardians can recognize him or her easily.
besides
, if the clothing of each
class
 level
be
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 different,
then
 separating the groups and classes with
less
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 efforts would be possible.
in addition
, when the
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teenagers
theenagers
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teenagers
 leave home, their
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parents
parrents
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parents
 can find out whether they are heading to
school
 or not.
moreover
, the children in high
school
 are more sensitive about what is going on around them and look at the topics differently. having
same
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 clothing in the
class
 will prevent
to create
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 a gap between wealthier
family
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 and the others and help them to focus on essential matters,
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even though
eventhough
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even though
 there are various
fact
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 to feel the difference but it will positively
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effect
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. to conclude,
although
 permitting the young human to choose what to wear in the
class
 is part their living rights but in my opinion, advantages of attending in
class
 with the unify
coutfit
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outfit
 would be more that freely choose the clothing.
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