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many Correct your spelling
Even though
of
culprits have been punished in a proper way,Change preposition
apply
increasing
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the increasing
number of
crime rates prove that legal authorities have been missing something valuable Correct quantifier usage
apply
at
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in
crime
mitigation process.Some Correct article usage
the crime
people
hold the opinion that main social issues Use synonyms
such
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ad
poor educational background and poverty should be solved in order Correct your spelling
as
yo
suppress all kinds of illegal activities. I agree thatCorrect your spelling
to
,
if both the government and the society should come forward to support poor Remove the comma
apply
people
.
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Firstly
, it is impossible that in many countries to provide Linking Words
right
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the right
education
as they face population growth at a considerable rate.In some other places, Use synonyms
education
mainly focuses on job purposes rather than emphasizing Use synonyms
on
social values.Change preposition
apply
As a result
, knowingly or unknowingly Linking Words
people
act as unthoughtful and end up in prison.To illustrate, In India,the number of rape cases Use synonyms
have
been increasing day by day because of Change the verb form
has
lack
of proper sex Correct article usage
a lack
education
. Use synonyms
In addition
, Linking Words
people
find loopholes and Use synonyms
being
fearless without thinking Wrong verb form
are
the
negative consequences that they have Change preposition
about the
done
in Unnecessary verb
apply
the
society.
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apply
Secondly
, A luxury lifestyle is a dream for every person Linking Words
inspite
of caste,colour ,gender and age.Correct your spelling
in spite
However
, poverty caused by the reduced number of job opportunities Linking Words
make
life more miserable and starving to death. In order to prevent Change the verb form
makes
the
starvation Correct article usage
apply
people
start to engage in several kinds of illegal activities Use synonyms
such
as smuggling, theft and resale of stolen goods, extortion and so on.To illustrate, Tourists are less interested Linking Words
to visit
African countries as Change preposition
in visiting
this
place is well known for robbery caused by poverty.
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To conclude
, I plausibly agree with the fact that the government should promote action plans that could enhance Linking Words
people
's quality of life. I suggest that the government should create more job opportunities and make Use synonyms
the
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apply
people
aware Use synonyms
about
the importance of Change preposition
of
education
. Use synonyms
Therefore
,in the Linking Words
future
the crime rates would be decreasing significantly.Add a comma
future,
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