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Some say that museums must be cost-free, while others say museums require museum cards. Give your own opinion from your previous experience and knowledge.

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Museums
 are places where a nation’s history lives. People who
visit
 any city want to testify about the history of a country and obtain information about it. Many
museums
 charge for
admission
, while others are free. There are some advantages and disadvantages of
this
 situation. The
first
 advantage of
museums
 charging for
admission
 is their contribution to the national economy. International cities
such
 as Istanbul, London and Paris host thousands of tourists annually. Undoubtedly,
museums
 in these cities are the most visited places and request an insignificant amount of
money
. These fees, which appear to be small on an individual basis, reach large sums when thousands or even millions of tourists are taken into account. Another advantage is some opportunities brought with it. Some
museums
 offer cards that allow guests to enter
museums
. These cards provide access to the
museum
 where the card was received and many contracted
museums
.
This
 advantage encourages card owners to
visit
 many other
museums
.
This
 statement is
also
 true from another point of view: Something paid for is valued more. If something is free, it is used more carelessly because
money
 resulting from a particular effort is not given in return.
On the contrary
, you will be more cautious in your actions if you pay for something or get a
money
 service. So if you
visit
 a
museum
 for
admission
, you will pay more attention to the historical artefacts there. The
first
 disadvantage of
museums
 charging for
admission
 is that those with insufficient financial means are prevented from visiting
museums
. It decreases the number of guests coming to
museums
. Another disadvantage is the
admission
 fee. If these amounts are more than necessary, visitors who set some spending limits may skip the
museum
visit
. All in all, I find it quite natural for
museums
 to charge for
admission
. The advantages,
such
 as the value of the service received for
money
 and the income from
museum
 visits, outweigh the disadvantages.
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