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Many claim that the fast food industry had a negative effect on the environment, eating habits, and families. To what extend do you agree or disagree?

#food #industry #effect #environment #habits #families
To begin
 with, on Saturday morning at exactly 7:30 am my father wants me to drop him at the bus station,
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an inspection from the higher officials.
Moreover
, my mother makes three different kinds of dishes for lunch. I dropped my mother at her office at 10:30 pm, and I did not have my breakfast.
However
, I have spent more than 3 hours on a video call with one of my dearest friends. We shared every moment from the
last
 2 months, as well as he gave some valuable tips related to IELTS writing tasks. And I am sure that would be really helpful for me. And that video call gave me some kind of motivation for my exam. If I follow those steps in my exam, I will definitely score my desired band score in my
next
 turn. I guess I am the reason behind three unsuccessful exams. I am not giving my utmost effort to my exam.
As a result
, It costs around a huge amount. Tomorrow is a holiday for my parents. I have to wake up as soon as possible, as well as, there are some small works in our home related to the Air conditioner.
Thereafter
, There are some chances to play cricket in the evening at ABM ground.
Furthermore
, we have to go for the special screening of Mahesh babu's Pokiri movie at 6:00 pm. I am eagerly waiting for that theatrical experience. I guess tomorrow I have to complete all three modules practise sessions by the evening itself.
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