What do you think are the main causes of inequality between rich and poor nations in the world? What can be done to reduce this gap? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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between
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and underdeveloping countries, the factors contributing to the differences among the advance and
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undeveloped
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in the Globe,
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, there are so many reasons that contribute to the rift between the wealthy and poor
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, in
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of
civilization
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a lot
of opportunities to the
country
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a researcher named Mark chi from China publish about the income of china, in his study he noted that the advancement in
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technology gives room for
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to build industry and a lot of things in the
country
which boost the
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of the
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and makes life easier for the citizens and immigrants,
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,
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can bring some
level
of inequality to the underdeveloped
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to the Factor.
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growth
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natural resources and the educational
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community
growth
. Some underdeveloping
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lack basic
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the leader, and
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growth
of
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peers. The
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effect of
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to the
country
of Tanzania
this
brought some
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back to the
country
.
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, the ratio of
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has a major role in a
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is higher than the
level
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the
country
will be lagging behind,
this
will result in poor production, and
this
might lead to
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from the product which
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the community
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and there is no staff to feel the space there will be
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in production which affect the
economy
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growth
. In conclusion, the major difference between
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and underdeveloping countries is
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in technology and
civilization
,
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of both boost
economy
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resources and make
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ahead of other. In my
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if the government can
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re
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structure
the
country
and ask for help from the
advance
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country
the
level
of
civilization
will be equal and there won't be any form of oppression or rift between the countries.
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