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The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical apliances and amount of time spent doing in households in one country between 1920 and 2019. Summarises the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant.

The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical apliances and amount of time spent doing in households in one country between 1920 and 2019. Summarises the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant.
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The line chart illustrates how
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the uses
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uses
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use
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 of electrical appliances have been changing since 1920.
This
also
 shows how many
hours
people
 in one country spend doing
houseworks
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housework
 between 1920 to 2019.
Overall
, the percentage of households with electrical equipment soared in about 100 years. Among them, the growth of washing machines was declining in the 1960s. Inverse proportion to the ratio of them,
less
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fewer
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 and
less
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fewer
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people
 are spending time on
houseworks
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housework
. When it comes to the percentage of households with electrical appliances, the ratio of vacuum cleaners doubled from 50% in 1940 to about 100% in 2019.
On the other hand
, though no one used a refrigerator in 1920, more than 50% of
people
 utilized it as a household in 1940. The number of
hours
 that
people
 are doing
houseworks
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housework
 in a week is decreasing slightly from 1920 to 2019. Surprisingly,
people
 arranged
houseworks
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housework
house works
 for 20
hours
 even though they did
for
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it for
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 50
hours
 in 1920.
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