Some people think that the government should spend more money on public services rather than wasting money on the arts. To what extend do you agree or disagree?

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Some
people
think that we should spend more money on facilities
instead
of
teachers
.
In contrast
, other
people
say
spend
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more money on
teachers
is better.
This
issue has been discussed frequently in
modern
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generation. From my point of view, these two
cost
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are both important for education.
However
, if I can only afford one of these. I would choose to spend on
teachers
.
Besides
, some reasons and details will be explained in the following paragraphs. On one hand, some
people
think we should pay more
on
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teachers
than the
computers
.
In other words
, they think
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teaching effectiveness is more necessary than
high quality
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high-quality
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computers
. From their perspective, the learning result of students
is depends
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on the teaching method by
teachers
.
For instance
, there
are
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is
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something hard in
the
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mathematic
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,
teachers
can
invention
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drawing
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drawings
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or
song
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songs
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to
makes
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make
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students
to
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apply
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memorize
it
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them
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.
Moreover
,
allocate
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more funding to hire remarkable
teachers
will increase the character of education.
On the other hand
, partially of
people
think that we should mainly
spent
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spend
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on
computers
. From my point of view,
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technology is
progress
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the progress
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a lot in recent years.
In addition
, using ecteronic devices in
educations
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education
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have
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has
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some advantages.
For example
, it makes our learning process more smoothly and
convenient
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more convenient
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.
Besides
,
global
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warming situation is worse gradually now.
In addition
, students can use
the
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electronic books
by
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via
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computers
through the internet or software.
As a result
, it can reduce lots of
papers
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consumption to improve the global warming situation. In conclusion, the electronic facilities and teaching quality are
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bott
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critical for education, it is
concern
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about the learning character of
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the student
a student
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student
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students
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. From my point of view, a school which has lots of good
computers
but there is
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not
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no
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teacher
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a teacher
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can teach, these
computers
are wasting.
In contrast
, there are some outstanding
teachers
in the school, spend more money on
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the computer
a computer
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computer
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computers
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can support the teaching and learning.
Finally
, If I can only choose one to pay more, I think I will spend more on hiring
the
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a
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teacher who is brilliant.
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