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In some countries, most people prefer to rent their homes rather than buying them. What are the advantages and disadvantages of renting a home?

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Nowadays,
people
 in some nations consider owning a home to be more important than renting
one
. Despite the high price
in
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 purchasing a
house
 or an apartment,
people
 still see owning an accommodation as an essential task for a mature adult.
However
,
this
 trend can be both advantages and disadvantages.
To begin
 with, the reason why
people
 prefer to own a
house
 is that owning
one
 can give them
sense
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 of belonging.
People
 buy their residence in
one
 location,
that
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 means that they will stay there for quite a long time. They will get to know more about the environment, not to mention being more familiar with the
neighborhood
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.
In contrast
, renting
an
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accommodation could be the symbol of an unstable life.
Although
 tenants can change their places to live easily since they do not have to contemplate
about
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the many
years long
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 mortgage
payment
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payments
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.
However
, the shorter time they stay in
one
 place, they have
less
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 opportunities to make an attachment to a city or a
house
.
Additionally
, being a tenant
is often consider
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 to be poor in some countries.
As a result
, some
people
 believe that owning a home can do good
to
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for
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 a person and a family whereas renting cannot. Though owning things gives
people
sense
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a sense
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 of achievement, there is still a major
drawback
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the drawback
a drawback
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 of buying a dwelling. In
recent
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the recent
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 real estate
market
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markets
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of
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in
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 some countries, the prices of accommodations are unaffordable for normal
people
. If
people
 spend all their savings on buying a
house
, they will inevitably spend the rest of
theirs
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their
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 lives chased by the mortgage. In conclusion, from my perspective, owning a home can benefit the owner. It leads the owner and the family to a more stable life.
On the other hand
, if buying a residence can be a financial burden to the buyer, renting
one
definitely
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is definitely
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 a better choice to make.
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