Many parents today do not spend much time with their children. Why is this? Does this affect parents or children?

Nowadays, a vast majority of
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are busy with
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and could not spend a great deal of
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with their offspring. In
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, and I would argue that
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phenomenon can have huge
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on kids.
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with, in my opinion, there are several reasons why these days
parents
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have less free
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to spend with their
children
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.
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and foremost, by expanding cities and growing population, the cost of living has increased dramatically. Paying bills, renting accommodation and meeting essential needs, have led people to adopt more than
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jobs or to stay for longer hours in workplaces in order to earn high salaries.
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, unlike past, when only men were considered
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breadwinners, nowadays both men and women are working outside the house, which makes the amount of parental
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limited to night hours when
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are normally sleeping or
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weekends,
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parents
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do household chores. I think
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it is the kids who might be influenced largely by
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of effective communication with
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due to the confined
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that
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give them.
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,
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might suffer emotionally and mentally
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the absence of their
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. They might lose the warmth and intimate atmosphere of home and could not share their problems, concerns and feeling with
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who are not available most of the
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.
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, nurses and babysitters can not play the parental role and bring up
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in the way that
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mothers and fathers can. In
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way,
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might adapt
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peers’
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and if they are not suitable
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friends
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,
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being
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an impolite
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, rude or juvenile
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, there is a risk of becoming offenders, which can jeopardize the offspring’s future lives. In conclusion, I believe that in
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era, families might not have enough
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to spend at home and it has adverse effects on
children
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’s lives.

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