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Some people would say that parents should pay their children for small home duties (cleaning, washing dishes). Other would disagree. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

#people #parents #children #home #duties #dishes
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Money is important and necessary for everybody. Some communities believe that offspring should be paid by their parents for doing domestic chores. In
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 essay, I will consider both sides of the argument and
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 give my opinion on the matter. On the one side, Some pupils say that it is admirable to give payments to their children. In
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 modern technology, every person requires money for their basic needs. It is satisfactory to give payment for doing domestic
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 like cleaning, washing dishes, etc.
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, my younger brother hates to clean up his own room meanwhile he requires more payment for his stuff. So it will be empirical to be independent. On the other side, Some communities believe that it is unpleasant to pay for their own offspring.
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 may lead to spoiling their offspring. If parents stop giving payments
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 they do want ever they want. Children should feel responsible to do their own
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 and should help their parents by doing some domestic
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. In conclusion, I believe that it is good to give cash to their offspring as pocket wealth. And offspring should do some domestic
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 to get some empirical knowledge to be independent.
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