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some people believe that "Employers should not be concerned about the way their employees dress, but the quality of their work". To what extend do you agree or disagree?

#people #employers #employees #dress #quality #work
It is widely accepted that the confrontation between employers caring about the way their
employees
 dress and the quality of their
work
 has been emerging as a heated topic among publicity. While some people claim that
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 and synchronicity of their
company
 should be taken, I am of the opinion that
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 quality of their
work
 has become increasingly dominant due to the benefits it offers. It is believed by a great number of people that
employees
 should wear the
company
's uniform for several reasons.
Firstly
, in order to
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its
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discipline and synchronicity, most
of
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workers
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 have to wear the same outfit for working days,
for example
 in a big traditional
company
, leaders offer their
servant
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servants
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 to always remember that they are a part of the brand and each of them in other subsidiary
company
have
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 to wear the similar.
Secondly
, seniors reckon that out-look
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should
 not be concerned in labouring hours. What could happen if their
employees
 just care about daily outfits without focussing on
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?
However
, I believe that the advantages of the quality of their
work
 significantly surpass those of
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synchronicity. The
first
 thing that attracts people is because of each person's unique style.
Employees
 can wear which suits them and makes them confident to get ready for
work
.
Moreover
, keeping wearing a fixed suit
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 eight hours does not give them
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comfort while completing missions.
That is
 the main reason why there are more and more young companies
allow
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 their servant to wear formal things nowadays.
Also
, they will have more time
caring
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 about themselves, which contributes
in
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 the overall and objective view of the
company
. In conclusion, if the
employees
 are satisfied with their outfit for working, they can boost
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productivity and corporate value
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 best way. At that time, the
company
 is
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also
aslo
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also
 "dressed well" and even employers or any class have to
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to
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them.
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