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Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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A disappointing job or being out of cash is one of a million troubles humans might face during their lifetime. Some
people
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 seem to accept living with these difficulties, while others consider that they’ll try working to get through
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. With these two ideas, I have several points of view which will be discussed below.
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, it’s understandable that
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 nowadays are willing to adopt unsatisfactory lives or boring offices. We can see that the world has faced
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serious overpopulation and an epidemic regularly. These natural and artificial disasters soon lead to high competitive recruitments, unemployment, and the pressure of additional fees which decrease individuals’ chances to get their jobs. Humans
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 struggle to have a stable income
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 and prefer unsuitable appointments with
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salary
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 to their favourite work.
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, especially
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, admit their broken conditions as well since they’re both unable to get a job or pay their debts at the moment due to the same reason above.
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, many youngsters,
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 from high-qualified universities,
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 jobless, or have to accept being
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manual labour
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 and work temporarily at some jobs
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 as delivery, waitress, or driver - which are poorly paid and their conditions are terrible.
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 that, trying to improve
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 situations is probably possible, since there are lots of professions that arise recently. The development of technology and the width of social networks easily connect
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 to chances, and the enormous sources on the internet can support you
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 your knowledge everywhere through a display, to get you ready for your work.
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, your attempt to improve your life sometimes helps you develop excellent characteristics. Even if you fail, you still learned the lessons of being patient and persevering, which gain your opportunities to succeed afterwards. We have seen many stories of inventors or founders of famous brands struggling to complete their dreams, and without them, many significant inventions wouldn’t be brought to our lives In my opinion, I’m on the side of the
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 who are willing to try to better their lives, because even if it is reasonable to accept poverty, I still believe that putting enough effort could bring miracles not only to individuals
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 but
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 to the society.

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To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • adversity
  • resilience
  • stoicism
  • contentment
  • cope
  • adapt
  • endure
  • persevere
  • settle
  • ambition
  • tenacious
  • determined
  • resourceful
  • optimistic
  • self-improvement
  • proactive
  • initiative
  • transform
  • overcome
  • confront
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