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In the modern world, it is possible to shop, work and communicate with people via the internet and live without any face-to-face contact with others. Is it a positive or negative development?

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Thanks to the rapid development of technology,
people
 nowadays can almost get everything done through the
internet
. There is no need to contact others in person. As far as I am concerned, I think it is definitely a double-edged sword which has both positive and negative development. Starting with the positive side of the phenomenon, it is without
doubt
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 that the invention of the
internet
 has reduced the boundaries in terms of distance. With a click on our phones, we can easily communicate with
people
 on the other side of the world without even stepping out of our room. Not only can we talk with other human beings who are in distant locations, but we can
also
 attend meetings or buy imported products easily. It is significantly convenient for everyone nowadays, especially during the pandemic when global citizens have been confined in their own houses.
However
, there are
also
 downsides if
internet
 users are overly addicted to the technology. Not only does it fail to reduce the distance between
people
, it
conversely
 weakens the relationship between two humans.
For example
, the younger generation tends to chat via social media despite that two
people
 are actually sitting in front of each other. According to the survey conducted by Harvard Business school in 2020, around 60% of
people
 whose ages ranged from 15 to 65 years old admitted that they prefer to communicate through their phones so as to avoid awkwardness. In conclusion, even though the
internet
 has benefited humans in plenty of ways in terms of reducing distance boundaries, there are
also
 several drawbacks
such
 as many
internet
 users have used it to
such
 an unhealthy extent. In my opinion, I do not think it can be categorized as either positive or negative. In fact,
people
 should take both sides into consideration.
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