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In the future all cars, buses and trucks will be driverless. The only people travelling inside these vehicles will be passengers. Do you think the advantages of driverless vehicles outweigh the disadvantages?

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It is hard to deny that
vehicles
 without
drivers
 will make many
people
be
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unemployed, and
such
 a fact leads impressionable
people
 to generate the opinion that
driverless
vehicles
 have more disadvantages.
However
,
such
 a statement suffers from both logical and factual fallacies. As far as safety, economy, and job position are considered, I strongly disagree with
such
opinion
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.
First
 and foremost, I believe
driverless
vehicles
 have more advantages because they are safer transportation. To be specific,
less
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people
 die from
driverless
vehicles
.
Vehicles
 with
drivers
 lead
an
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 ocean of traffic accidents every year, but the statistics show us that only a few traffic accidents happened because of
driverless
vehicles
. Passengers can have confidence in the safety of
driverless
vehicles
.
Furthermore
, the fact that there is no need for millions of
people
 to learn
driving
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 indicates that
driverless
vehicles
 can save money. Take the case of my friend Joey, who has taken the driving test
for
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three times because
several
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 mistakes.
As a result
, he paid more than 8000 yuan for his driving license. If
the
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driverless
vehicles
 are in use widely, Joey will never waste so much money on learning
driving
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.
Nevertheless
, a voice arises that
driverless
vehicles
 will make many
people
such
 as
drivers
 lose their jobs. Ironically, more positions will be generated
as
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 the fast development of
driverless
vehicles
 and those jobs offer more than
drivers
.
For instance
, there must be a lot of
vacancy
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vacancies
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of
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 the
driverless
vehicles
 engineer position and with the knowledge about
vehicles
,
drivers
 are able to be engineers quickly.
Therefore
, we
donnot
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don't
do not
 worry about
the
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unemployment. In conclusion, in terms of safety, economy, and job position, the advantages of
driverless
vehicles
 outweigh the disadvantages. While there are one thousand Hamlet in one thousand
people
’s eyes, I am confident that my opponents will compromise after being shown
to
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my article.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • driverless vehicles
  • advantages
  • disadvantages
  • increased safety
  • reduced traffic congestion
  • improved efficiency
  • accessibility
  • disabled
  • elderly
  • job displacement
  • privacy concerns
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