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Some believe that more action should be taken to prevent crime, while others feel that crime is being tackled effectively now. Discuss both sides and give your own opinion.

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Though
crime
 rates have fallen to historic lows in most nations, there are many who feel
further
 action is still required. In my opinion, there should always be
crime
 prevention efforts,
however
, on one level,
crime
 is being opposed adequately. Those who believe
crime
 requires greater prioritisation identify its effects, particularly in underserved segments of a population.
Crime
 is still pervasive in areas rife with poverty,
such
 as in neglected neighbourhoods in inner cities. An illustrative example of
this
 would be the infamous favelas of Brazil. Residents in these communities must remain constantly vigilant for muggings and robberies and there is a high likelihood that in their lifetime they will come into contact with criminal elements. The causes of
such
crime
-ridden slums are complex but the results for millions of individuals in cities around the world deserve meaningful countermeasures.
Nonetheless
, a criminal activity already receives sufficient funding as evidenced by its decline.
Crime
 is best tackled through a combination of economic, educational, and criminal justice reform and as developing countries become wealthier, there is a concomitant effect on
crime
. Criminality is
therefore
 being addressed and it would be unrealistic to expect a world without
crime
 given the realities of human nature.
Instead
 of diverting more money towards an area on the mend already, governments can continue to
also
 fund schools, hospitals, state universities, defence, infrastructure and a host of other areas that may themselves indirectly contribute to eradicating
crime
. In conclusion, though
crime
 impacts the daily lives of many citizens, it is already being successfully curbed and there are other key areas deserving of budgetary consideration. Governments must
nonetheless
 balance these concerns and remain vigilant toward changes in
this
 promising pattern.
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