PEOPLE ARE BECOMING MORE AND MORE OBESE. What are the reasons of this problem and how can this be solved?

Nowadays, obesity
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has become
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much more
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common among
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people. In my opinion, I think
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being overweighting
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overweighting
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overweight
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is
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the lack of activities and eating
high calories
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high-calorie
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meals,
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it can be managed and reduced by extra exercise and a
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healthy
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diet.
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, the main reason for
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is that people don't do many activities. To illustrate, today's technology leads to less physical movement.
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, most things can be done
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you are
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in your chair at home. A simple example, if I wanted to have information about Math, I don't have to go and search for it in the library, I can easily get it from my room by googling it.Another reason is eating an unhealthy meal which contains high calories and sugar,
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as
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, Pizza, Pepsi
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etc.
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, most people today depend on fast food, because they are busy all the time working
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, and
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it is easier to get the food ready rather than make it at home.
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, being overweight can be decreased , beginning with
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adding more sports to our daily life.
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example, using bicycles when going to work or school, walking to the supermarkets
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instead
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of using cars, and even when you are doing some work on computers
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, a
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little exercise can be done. A second thing that would be useful
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is a healthy diet.
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some minutes from our day to cook at home
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would change our health. namely, eggs and salad are clear examples of healthy food and won't take time
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. In conclusion, obesity is a fact we are facing
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, and its rate
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is increasing
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more and more
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a lot of reasons like lack of physical exercise and a bad diet.
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it can be reduced
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sports and eating healthy would be a great solution.

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