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You are part of a group of musicians who meet on Tuesday and Friday evenings to practise in the community hall. You have been told, however, that it is no longer possible for the group to use the hall. Write a letter to the manager. In the letter: describe what the group does explain why the group is good for the community suggest alternative days and times for practice

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Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing
this
 to bring your attention to a difficulty that we are facing with the new schedule of the community hall.
To begin
 with, let me explain who we are. We are Flash Times, a charity band, we perform at birthday parties, wedding functions, etc.
Secondly
, I will explain what we do to our neighbourhood. We don't charge for our performances, but we accept donations. The donations that we collect, go to the child health care foundation of our council. Child health care foundation maintains the public park, where our children play in the evenings.
Moreover
, they conduct tutorials, by spending the money that we offer them. Though we continue to do good work, with the new timetable of the community hall, we are facing difficulty to continue our practices. We met every Tuesday and Friday in the audio room to do our practices. I kindly request from you, consider our good work and make necessary arrangements to get us back on our training. I would appreciate your kind attention to
this
 matter, and I look forward to hearing from you. Yours sincerely, Supun
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