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In some culture are often told they can achieve anything if they try hard enough. what are the advantages and more disadvantages of giving children these massages?

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The
City
 Hospital in 2007 had simple detail and has significantly changed so far. The
City
 Hospital is generally accessible from Ring
Road
 on the north side and
City
Road
 on the south side. There used to be only one car park for staff and other people
also
.
Furthermore
, there were many bus stops on Hospital
Road
 in the
center
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 of the map. As time goes by, they have done a lot of changes to the overall view of the Hospital
City
 to upgrade its facilities for patients to be more comfortable. Two roundabouts are added between
City
Road
 and Hospital to make it easy for transportation. Plus, the parking lot is separated into two parking: one is for staff on Hospital
Road
 and one is public for everyone which is situated on Ring
Road
. A bus station is located opposite the car park for the staff for anyone who wants to catch the bus. The
City
 Hospital has become more beneficial for citizens living there than ever before since the government is aware of the fact that the
City
 Hospital needs modern and reasonable facilities.
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