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Some people think that e-books are the death of paper books while others think that paper book will never disappear. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

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Globalization of
internet
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 through the continents is allowing
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having
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 access to lots of information including
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books
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. There is an idea being claimed by a number of people that
paper
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books
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 are about to get lost due to
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e-
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books
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, while others believe that
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paper-based
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paper based
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books
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 will never vanish. In my opinion, due to the availability of different types along with
time saving
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 of the reader, electronic
books
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 will continue to increase in need,
meanwhile
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paper
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books
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also
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 have their importance and they will keep being a part of reader’s life.
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 with,
development
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 of
internet
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 has positively affected the way people read.
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, for
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last
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 couple
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years
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 numerous electronic versions of new and historical
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 are uploaded to the internet from where a person can get his lovely book not regarding
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his location.
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 survey conducted by Oxford University asked 100 students to find historical
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 (which some of them do not exist in
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version
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) around the Bristol libraries, surprisingly 98% of students found
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though
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in e-version.
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, the trend of electronic
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 led to saving vast time
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 in student life.
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 to say, when there are examinations or assignments upcoming, students may find
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books
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more handy
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 rather than going to the libraries since it saves their precious time.
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, handbooks had been a part of humanity and will continue
its
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importance
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. With the help of
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paper based
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books
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 our ancestors left essential education
through
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 hundreds of years.
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, a physical book is less stressful
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 to
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books
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 (majority
ads
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 may appear while reading) that
attracts
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 many to prefer
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paper based
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 ones.
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 of conclusion, though handbooks have importance and good feelings during
reading
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 which can not be replaced by
e-
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books
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, electronic types will be in much demand in close future for their benefits mentioned above.

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