Prevention is better than cure. Researching and treating diseases is too costly so it would be better to invest in preventive measures

It is always wise to work on the prevention side rather than spending a large amount of money on treatments. In my opinion, I agree with
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statement and firmly believe that those who take good care of their health end up spending less on their medical expenses.
However
, there are some fatal
diseases
which cannot be prevented.
Firstly
, preventing any disease is the key to
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low medical
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;
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, reducing
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burden.
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can only be done where people do not only have
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adequate knowledge of prevention but
also
understand its importance.
In addition
to
this
, family habits play a crucial role in adapting to a lifestyle where you act proactively in reducing the chances of any future illness.
Secondly
, prevention is a
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option for developing any potential
diseases
as compared to risky options of treating
diseases
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in circumstances when the treatment is new, and the doctors are considering you as a sample of your experiment.
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, in
such
cases, you are
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or consequences that treatment might have.
Lastly
, while
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side is the safest side from both financial and non-financial
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of view; there are some
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which can not be prevented and are
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, a certain proportion of money must always be reserved for treating any su
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • proactive
  • preventive measures
  • lifestyle diseases
  • public health
  • healthcare expenditure
  • cost-effective
  • chronic conditions
  • early detection
  • immunization
  • health promotion
  • risk factors
  • non-communicable diseases
  • disease surveillance
  • preventive diagnostics
  • health literacy
  • universal healthcare
  • primary prevention
  • secondary prevention
  • tertiary prevention
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