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Why do students prefer doing part-time jobs during their studies? Do you ‎think this has more advantages or disadvantages?‎

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With all the smart features in it, mobile phones have become a major issue due to the
prducts
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products
 addictive nature. Youth tend to use
such
 devices to kill their time by playing games, posting photos and reading gossip without any control whatsoever.
As a result
, they have completely forgotten their priorities. Today, most
students
 are finding it hard to pay their university course fees. Because of that
students
 have no option but to do part-time jobs in order to find a buck while doing their studies.
This
 essay will discuss the pros and cons of doing a part-time job while studying and why the pros outweigh the cons. It is known to all that higher studies cost much. During
this
 time one person has to bear a lot of expenses. Sometimes it becomes a burden for a family especially the poor or large family. So to compensate for
this
 charge, the
students
 have to find out vacant places to earn money.
Besides
 money, it provides
students
 with lifetime experience which helps them later to be strong.
For example
, if a person works at a restaurant, he or she will learn the communication procedure through dealing with customers.
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