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Some people say the Olympic Games do not have a role to play in the 21st century. To extent your agree or disagree?

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Based on some people's views, it could not be supposed a role to play
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Olympic
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games
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 in the current century. In my opinion, for many reasons, these
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 have an important role in our life. Namely, it causes
sports
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 improvement, and governments dedicate specific
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 to
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.
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, some people disagree. I strongly believe that governments should have special attention to the
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games
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 and I have some reasons to prove my idea.
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 and foremost, these
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 should be held, because it encourages individuals to play
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 and participate in these competitions.
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,
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 are an essential part of humans' lives and it is vital for their health.
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 but not least, these competitions occasion that governments to consider a huge budget to develop
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 in their countries.
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, some countries
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 as China and Australia allocate a large number of money to be successful in these
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.
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, some people have opposite new points on it.
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, they believe that the sport is a hobby and holding these competitions is not essential.
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, they think it is the waste of time and money.
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, many individuals like these matches, but they think these
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 do not have a role to play. they believe that the
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games
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 are as same as other
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 and that politicians created them to earn money. In conclusion, the
Olympic
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games
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 persuade teenagers to take part in
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 activities and they motivate themselves to participate as an athlete in these
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. Indeed, if doing exercise expands in society, humans could have healthier and happier lives.
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