The tendency of human beings to copy one another is shown in the popularity of areas such as fashion and consumer goods. To what extent do you agree?

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that human beings have always been mitigating each other in various streams of their lives. A school of thought declares that
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trend
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as fashion and
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commodities
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purchase. I totally agree with
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history, predefined standards have always been influencing
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's decisions, from what they wear to how they look.
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have always been trying to keep up with these standards to be fitted
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, these days wearing
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have become rife among women. If a girl does not put on make-up, she will be considered sick or depressed due to her pale face.
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standards have led to a
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where individuals are under the pressure of mimicking each other inevitably, pining their
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to be accepted by their community and not left out.
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, human beings usually choose celebrities as role models in their lives and follow their rules blindly. Even though
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successful
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have achieved accomplishments in their careers. ordinary
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get inspired from whatever they do, in all aspects of life, pining their hopes to
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just as they did. Advertisements on media showcase
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trend. As an example, business owners invite
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celebrities
to publicize their
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commodities
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is that business
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celebrities
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impacts on ordinary
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's decisions.
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, following certain
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contributes to a
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mimicking each other. To sum up,
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copy each other not only to get accepted and not
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in
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,
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but
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to become successful in life, just as their role models did.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • conform
  • social norms
  • evolutionary psychology
  • survival
  • advertising
  • influencer marketing
  • celebrity endorsements
  • trends
  • followers
  • psychological comfort
  • social ostracism
  • mass production
  • high-end fashion
  • uniformity
  • cultural homogenization
  • globalization
  • media
  • spread
  • affordable
  • imitate
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