Big salary is much more important than job satisfaction. Do you agree or disagree?

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Fat income is more relevant than

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fulfillment

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.I disagree with

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notion as it is important to be content and happy with your work so as to provide quality results and productivity.

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or contentment will bring about peace of mind.There is

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saying in my country that money cannot buy happiness.An individual who has all the money in the world and has no peace or happiness has got nothing. If a person is being paid a huge amount of money as salary and the individual is not satisfied with his work,

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a person will end up making continuous mistakes in their daily activities.

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could result in issues

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as queries or termination of jobs.

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,an employee who does not derive pleasure in what he does will definitely

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problems with his co-workers and commit blunders

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satisfaction will help to motivate a worker in several ways regardless of the salary he earns.It will

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help to provide good mental health as there will be no room for regrets which could lead to depression.

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an individual tends to go the

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to get his or her work done because he

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has a driving force which is contentment.He will always want to do more for the growth of his company and will do his

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with no expectations in return.They do not only improve themselves in the process but

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reach the targeted goal of their organization. In conclusion,I believe that happiness brings riches as health is wealth.And an individual satisfied with his

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happy man who will do everything possible to contribute his quarter to his

companies

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goals thereby providing the best possible results.

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Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

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Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

7.5

Clear & comprehensive ideas

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Appropriate word count

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281 words

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remuneration
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material possessions
fulfillment
work-life balance
stress levels
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Big salary is much more important than job satisfaction. Do you agree or disagree?

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apologize for damaging the product explain what happened say how are you going to fix the issue

Due to the increase in population in big cities, more and more people are living in small houses with very little or no outdoor space. What are the problems? What can be done to solve these problems?

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Some people think that money spent on protecting wild animals would be better than spending on improving the lives of the human population. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Your friend invited you to his/her birthday party, but you are not able to attend. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter -Explain why you cannot go - say that you will give your friend a gift the next time you see him/her -suggest another time and place to meet