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Nowadays many people choose to be self-employed rather than to work for a company or organization why might this be the case? what could be the disadvantage of being self-employed?

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These days
people
 revolutionize the way they
work
 and prefer to
work
individuals
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instead
 of working for companies and organizations . It cannot be surprising that self-employed has
attract
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 many heated debates in
this
 essay I tend to discuss the reasons and negative aspects of
give
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 an issue. In all
workplaces
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,workplaces
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 buses put regulations and employee obeys them strictly. Lack of freedom is the most significant
causes
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cause
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 which
Leads
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 to
work
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working
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 independently .
In other
words
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 the place employee should sit or the
work
 hours And the part which they must
work
 on it , All of them
determind
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determined
determine
 by another person. take a person as an example
Who
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They
He
She
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suffer
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suffers
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 from the habits of his coworker but he should stand the situation
then
 he will lose
the
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apply
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job satisfaction Just because of lack of freedom ,
Therefore
 the more rights that manager take from
employee
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the employee
an employee
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 ,the more
people
 to self-employment.
On the other
hand
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 social isolation is the most detrimental
effects
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effect
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 of
be
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being
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self employed
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self-employed
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 working individual
take
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taking
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 the opportunity of
making
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make
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 new friends Or working in a team which can cause
people
's social interaction
skill
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skills
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,
moreover
people
 are suffering
the
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a
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 lack of motivation in self
employing
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employed
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, there is no one to contribute at solving problems or expanding break times with them.
Psychologist
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Psychologists
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 believe that
people
 who
work
 independently are more in danger of getting depression rather than
people
 who
work
 in a company. So loneliness is the biggest
results
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result
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 of being self-employed which they will face
it
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apply
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. In
conclusion
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 it is difficult to choose how to
work
 in
companies
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company
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 or
individuals
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individual
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. most
people
 prefer to
work
 for themselves I do believe that the benefits of being self-employed
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outweight
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Outweight
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Outweigh
 the drawbacks and they will improve the quality of their lives if they
work
 independently.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • self-employed
  • company
  • organization
  • freedom
  • independence
  • income potential
  • flexibility
  • working hours
  • working location
  • passions
  • interests
  • decision-making
  • business practices
  • disadvantages
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