Nowadays people like to use new electronic equipment. Do you think this is a positive or negative development?
Nowadays, electronic equipment is familiar to most people
due to
the enormous development in technology. In my opinion, I think it made a great change in our life
, and it is positive to keep up with the new ones. These types of equipment facilitate the work and add joy.
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, using electronic devices facilitates our jobs, using machines made
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makes
the
tasks easier for us and new versions definitely will be better. In Correct article usage
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, one of its important features of it is reducing the time and effort needed by humans. Fix the agreement mistake
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However
, these devices can be found in any part of our lives today and are irreplaceable. For example
, the coffee maker and the blender, are mostly used every day, these two machines do a lot of work and processes that needed hours in the past, in just a few minutes. So, is it evidence that electronic devices have made a huge positive change by making these tasks easier
On the other hand, television, headphones, cameras, computers, ....etc. add a lot of colours to our lives. For instance
, when someone is bored and has no company, he can easily enjoy his time by watching TV or
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or just browsing the internet. Correct article usage
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furthermore
, there are video games which can be shared between family members or friends, so they can have group fun. In addition
, using computers and e-books for studying leads to make
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development. Really, they made a beautiful difference in our days.
In conclusion, I believe that electronic equipment become an essential part of everyone's day as a positive impact. they make jobs easier and quicker, Correct article usage
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pleasure and entertainment into the human souls.Wrong verb form
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