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Shopping has become a favourite pastime for many young people. Why is this the case? Should they be encouraged to spend their free time in a better way?

Every generation has its peculiarities, including different preferences in the ways of spending their
time
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 after work and studies. Nowadays a lot of young
people
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 choose shopping as their best activity,
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 issue
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phenomenon
 has some reasons for it and their choice ought to be respected. The
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 argument for shopping is a wide range of brands that nearly everyone can afford. as the quality of modern
mass market
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 products is high, the problem of finding modern clothes can be easily solved. What is more, shopping malls can be found in every town, to say nothing about big cities. These
centers
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 include a lot of shops that can satisfy any taste any teenager can buy whatever they need.
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 but not least, Generation Z is obsessed with taking part in social life, both virtual and real. In their attempts to do that are connected with buying bright and unusual clothes, which takes
time
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 to find something special, so, they need to spend their free
time
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on
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shopping. In terms of
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 trend, a person should make their own decision on the way of spending their free
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. Indeed, any pressure or opinion imposed on young
people
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 is known to produce a negative effect.
People
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 of
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 change often change their points of view and habits and later they are highly likely to change their shopping habits.
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,
people
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 of the younger generation should be allowed to make their own decision in terms of their free
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 habits. To conclude, an opportunity to buy items that young
people
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 want and
willingness
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the willingness
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 to attract others may be the reasons
of
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for
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 the popularity of shopping among young
people
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. They need to have freedom in choosing their free
time
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 activities without any extra pressure.

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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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