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Some people think that a person can never understand the culture of a country unless they speak the language. Do you agree with opinion?

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There is a challenging topic among people that many opine the language proficiency is the only way to
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 background in a local country ,
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, they have believed in
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 idea because of verbal skill is
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 from others ,alongside,
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 fluency in
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aboriginal
 language will bring more intimacy among individuals ,so , I am going to bring some piece of evidence to confirm
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 region , so ,
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 with citizens ,anybody cannot reach to
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 knowledge of new society ,
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pronunciation
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relation ship
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 between foreign and local people,in my experience, when I was as a medical doctor in a village ,I have found if I could speak in their
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 ,they were more like me ,so ,their grand people have tried to talk about
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historical
 stories that these were me more aware
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 their dreams and values . In
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, civilization has been constructed based on the shoulders of human verbal skill ,
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approved when human could
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 that they have been started to communicate with others by creating a speech.
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 , better
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speaking
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speaking
 skills can be able close
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individuals
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 together ,because communication is organized by the native language and cultural knowledge has been extracted from stories and effective communication through
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dialogue
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dialogue
 with others, so , I completely agree with
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 statement that speaking is a powerful method to percept a culture in a community.
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