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Being a celebrity, such as a famous film star or sports personality-brings problems as well as benefits. Do you think that being a celebrity brings more benefits or more problems?

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The
chart
 illustrates the proportion of exchanged students graduating from university in Canadian provinces between 2001 and 2006. At
first
 glance, the highest percentage of exchange students graduating was in New Brunswick in 2006 at approximately 12% while
Alberta
 was
in contrast
 with over 4%. Plus, the international pupils graduating in
Alberta
 had a higher percentage than the province below with 6%. Both Nova Scotia and British Columbia had the same trend in the
chart
 with over 10%. The figure for Manitoba had a similar proportion accounting for over 6%. Looking at the
chart
 for more detail, the number of international students in Quebec rose slightly between 2001-2006 (with 6%-over8%). Specifically, the figure for Ontario in 2006 increased a half that of 2001, and
Alberta
 had a decrease in 2006 to approximately 2% of 2001. In general, most of the figures in the
chart
 had a rise of nearly a half after 5 years whether Quebec went up slightly and
Alberta
 fell
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