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Some people believe that medical doctors should also be academic researchers at the same time. Do you agree or disagree?

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Nowadays, the medical profession is a very noble profession.
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, many people think that the medical doctor must become
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professonal
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professional
 in researching diseases. In my opinion, I completely agree with
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,
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the
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 academic
reseachers
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researchers
, your treatment results will be better. You will understand
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a lot
 about
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case
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. You will know how to find the
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information
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diseases
 in the book or
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 the internet, and you will know how to treat
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. You can
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 to date
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 latest about the disease.
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, your treatment results will be better.
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, if you are a professional researcher,you will improve your reputation in the hospital. You will know how to help and pass on
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 to
another doctors
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 better. You can know how to get your research published,
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 you can teach a young doctor study about
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diseases
disease
.
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,
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clinical doctors should be
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professional
researches
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researchers
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. it will help them a lot in their daily work of medical examination and treatment, improving their qualifications and ability to impart knowledge to everyone.
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