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Some academics say that every child should be taught to play an instrument. Do you agree or disagree with statement?

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It has been widely known that the importance of teaching how to play an
instrument
,
such
 as a piano and a guitar, from a perspective of efficient
education
. Yet, some people insist that all
children
 are obliged to learn how to play an
instrument
. I personally disagree with
this
 statement for several reasons. admittedly, learning how to play an
instrument
 has positive effects on
children
's legitimate growth. A study that compared brains of
children
 who had experienced
of
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being taught an
instrument
 and who had not shown enormous differences in development.
However
, teaching
to
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all
children
 has negative .
First
 of all, teaching how to use an
instrument
 costs significantly, so some households might not able to
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afford
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itafford
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. If parents want to teach how to play
a
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 piano ,
for instance
, they have to purchase a piano which costs more than $3,000 on average and send
children
 to an
instrument
 school which
also
 costs a great deal of money regularly.
Thus
, it can be said that
this
 could be a huge burden on the household's budget.
Secondly
, forcing every child to learn an
instrument
 would have a negative impact on society because it might cause a lack of diversity.
Although
 learning how to play an
instrument
 serves an important role in
education
, other kinds of experience, for ,instance playing sports, are
also
 important and indispensable elements for
children
. regarding that the
education
 of instruments requires great amounts of time, if
the
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all
children
 play an
instrument
, there are few opportunities
of
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 new
experience
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,
that
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 would reduce the diversity of society. In conclusion, I disagree with the statement that claims every child should
learnt
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 an
instrument
 because of the cost and possible negative effects on society
,
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 while understanding the importance of
instrument
education
.
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