It is important for children to learn the difference between right and wrong at an early age. Punishment is necessary to help them learn this distinction. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion? What sort of punishment should parents and teachers be allowed to use to teach good behaviour to children?

The neonates always know nothing when they were born. There is a long period for them to learn the
difference
between
right
and wrong at an early age before they grow up. Many parents believe that
punishment
is necessary to help
children
learn the
difference
between
right
and wrong at an early age.
However
, I didn'
t
quite agree with
such
opinions as for young infants the
punishment
cannot work as they didn'
t
know anything during that time. For
children
at the age of three to five years old when they started to
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the world around them. They couldn'
t
build up the idea of what is
right
and what is wrong. It is more important to encourage them to be brave to learn how to deal with the environment and learn to communicate with other people. It is until when they grow up to school ages that they started to know the
difference
between
right
and wrong. And it is at
this
period the
punishment
might work for the parents and teachers when they want to teach good
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to
children
.
However
, I do believe that
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punishment
should be the
last
method that we should
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as there are so many other choices to
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.
For example
, we can try to ask what would they feel if other
children
do the same
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to them
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Or we may just tell them they have made us
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upset by the rude
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? And we can tell them why
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is
right
and why something is wrong by just talking with the
children
in patience. We can
also
let the
children
themselves
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the things they had done
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right
or not. The parents can
also
cancel the coming gift if they keep behaving in an unpolite way. The teachers can
also
give high scores to those well-behaved
children
to set a good example
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those who didn'
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to help
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good
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. In general, I don’
t
think
punishment
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is a good method to help
children
to learn the
difference
between
right
and wrong or build up good
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • punishment
  • positive reinforcement
  • consequences
  • time-outs
  • removal of privileges
  • open communication
  • clear expectations
  • consistency
  • fairness
  • disciplinary action
  • proportionate
  • moral values
  • internalization
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