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These days huge portions of population are moving from rural areas to urban areas. Do you think it is a positive or a negative trend?

#portions #population #areas #trend
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It is often argued that
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 nowadays a large number of
indviduals
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individuals
 prefer to move from
countryside
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the countryside
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 to
cities
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. I will discuss positive aspects of
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 trend because urban
areas
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 not only provide
better
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a better
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 quality of life but
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 give job
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opportunities
opportunties
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opportunities
and education To commence with, one of the prominent
benefit
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benefits
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 is that some
people
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 prefer to live in
a
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a city
cities
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cities
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 as compared to
village
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a village
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 . To explain it, in urban
areas
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 masses become more employed and get more facilities as well as better salaries according to
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 they can easily fulfil their basic needs and have a better quality of life
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 they get more opportunities and posts
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doctor
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a doctor
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, mentors,worker
excetera
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etcetera
.
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, it is proved in headlines , Timelines of
india
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India
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 59
percent
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 of
people
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 decided to
moving
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move
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 in
metropolitan
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the metropolitan
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 area because of more vacancies are
availble
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available
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 area.
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, individuals give more importance to town because
cities
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 can offer more
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career
carrer
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career
 opportunities so they can secure their livelihood and future in a better way.
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,
cities
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 are more beneficial for every person because some
people
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think
thik
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think
 that if anybody
live
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lives
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 in
cities
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although
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 they have
better
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a better
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 standard of living yet good infrastructure facilities and medical care , education is
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 provided To explicate it,if
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individual
individuals
indiviual
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individual
 can earn
high
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a high
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 income from their
part time
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part-time
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 job
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 obviously they have
better
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a better
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 standard of living.
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 to
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, in urban
areas
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 there is
better
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a better
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education
eduaction
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education
 system for students as compared to rural and
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 medical care is provided in any case of emergency.
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,
cities
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 are more benefactor to earn a chunk of money to get
better
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a better
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 standard of living. In conclusion,
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 urban
areas
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is
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are
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considered
considerd
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considered
 as more beneficial for every person so that's why
people
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 prefer to live there because of
better
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the better
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 lifestyle while it is a positive aspect for every person to take
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 decision
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    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • migration
  • urbanization
  • positive trend
  • negative trend
  • economic opportunities
  • infrastructure
  • services
  • standard of living
  • overcrowding
  • strained resources
  • pollution
  • environmental problems
  • rural livelihoods
  • culture
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