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Nowadays, some people believe that fashion is very important for youngsters and it has negative impact on the people and society. Do you agree or disagree with statement?

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In recent times, the modern trend comes and influents many teenagers around the world, it is an improved
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appearance
apperance
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appearance
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fashion
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 era while some realize that it has a negative impact on
community
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 and human beings. From these statements, I agree that will have a bad impact
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social
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 and
this
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 essay I will discuss
explanation
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 subsequent paragraph below.
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Firts
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 of all, juveniles will pursue their new style
according
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 the trends without considering
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their parents' finance to spend much money to reach their
offsprings
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 as they believe that
the
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fashion
 is everything to present their appearance in public's attracted.
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 parents feel a big pressure with
this
 condition as they need more income to equip
needs
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, especially
for
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their
children
. To cite an example, almost
children
 tend to
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maintain
maintan
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maintain
 and exist with their social media to update new information related to
fashion
,
as a result
, many
children
 prefer
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maintaining
mantaining
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maintaining
 their style with new
fashion
 than keeping their attitude and
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 in public or sosmed.
In addition
 to
this
, the new
fashion
 forces people to adjust with him in all
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the situation
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situation
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 to reach a good impression from
public
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, but it is not
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. Public societies realize that every trend will affect
children
 to follow it and they can reject that but it could be difficult for their
offsprings
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 to avoid every new era as they are a gold generation who has to adapt
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 every situation. From
this
,
children
 will ignore the important parts of life that are boosting
skill
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 and showing
good
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 attitude. To sum up, juveniles tend to force their condition to get a good value from
public
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 but it is
wrong
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 perception and parents will be
more
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 pressure with their
financial economic
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 to fulfil their
offsprings'
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desire
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. A bad moral will be ignored by
children
 who prefer maintaining their
fashion
than
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 attitude on social media and
public
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